Prevention
Days can grow long with a sense of no hope
Life has its struggles of a too much to cope
I could know not the answers for a world of dismay
Fallen ‘pon hardships of a sure disarray
Money grows tighter so as can’t meet their needs
Obligations as mother are a challenge to heed
How can I feed them and who will buy clothes
Help with the housework? God only knows!
They disrupt any quiet and disobey me at will
Constantly crying, and the whining grows shrill
Lines of support mostly shatter or wilt
Relationship’s falter from foundation’s poor-built
An urge often rises all the harder to fight
You are weak with exhaustion; every nerve starts to bite
Control could be lost bringing anger to head
That’s when children get beaten; that’s when children get dead
One should see these portrayals as being unset by stone
There are choices to make if we’re not left alone
For the parent who struggles, there’s an alternate route
Teachers with answers to be found all about
In the training, assistance and support we provide
At each fork in the road better paths get applied
Here lies a purpose and the mission at core
Preventing abuse – we will work all the more
Copyright SGW 2009
4 comments:
I like the first one more...only because I think it is easy to understand and it seems your audience might not all be the type to analyze poetry. I think it speaks clearly.
But I'm not sure I understand this part -
Someone’s there
Are there answers
Is the second line a question?
Yes, I went no punctuation on the first poem.
Both poems are good but I would choose the second one. The second poem leaves the reader feeling like there is someone out there who is willing to help. If you are trying to instill a sense of hope during difficult times I would go with the second poem. Second half of second peom conveys hope in a clearer way.
i think the whole thing works nicely together... most people wont read past the first couple lines anyway unfortunately especially when the message is so important.....
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